I'm going to make this typed really nice and give it to my teacher as an end of the year gift. I want it to sound so good that she cries (in a happy way.) It would be nice if someone can read over it. Thanks in advance!
Mrs. ******,
I hope you realize how much you’ve done for me throughout the years. In forth grade, I was afraid to come to “the other side” because- even though it’s hard to believe- I was afraid of you, I don’t know why, but I was. It’s pretty funny now that I think of it, I mean, you’re not scary- you’re Mrs. ******! When I came to St. Vincent, everyone in the class already had friends, memories, and many years together. I felt so left out. The first class with you felt awkward, because I never had such a great teacher- it was so shocking, so hard to believe. I still felt left out. It seemed as though everyone in the class already knew you- it still wasn’t fair. I got bad grades in Math, but you still loved me. I was such a shy person; maybe it was me that wasn’t confident enough to have good friends like the rest of the class already did. In sixth grade, I was still a loner with only those “class friends” not best friends or anything. Math grades improved, but I wasn’t on the honor role; and throughout all of this, you were there. I don’t know how, but you impacted me and kept me going- you were confident that I could become more, so in return I did. Seventh grade was the year that I actually made a best friend. Also, my best math grade was a B, compared to the C/D average in 5th and 6th grade. Seventh grade was the year I became more secure, it was also the year you became my favorite teacher. Then another year ended, leaving one more year for me make a difference. I decided that I didn’t want to be “just another kid” that the teachers taught. I realized how wonderful St. Vincent and its people were- and what I was missing out on. 8th grade finally came- it’s the best year of school I’ve ever had and probably the one I will remember the most. It’s the year I changed the most. I am now very confident, outgoing, and (most of the time) easy to get along with. Eighth grade has the most memories for me- and all this would not be the same without you. I wouldn’t have written a biography of my St. Vincent life for nothing. You may be thinking that I’m crazy (once again,) but you HAVE impacted me. I actually helped me realize that life is fun to live even if you aren’t good at some school subjects. Now, don’t get me wrong, but my life wasn’t THAT depressing- I just didn’t have an awesome teacher like you that actually TAUGHT me things. Most kids go to school and just learn something, taker the test, and forget it until they go to college or get a job. But, those are the kids who were never blessed with I teacher like you. Everything you’ve taught me, as a person- not a student, I will remember forever. The gifts that you’ve influenced are: wonder and awe and courage. People say you are a teacher, but I say you are a teaching friend, someone who follows God.Can someone read over this letter and tell me what to change?
First you need to read it over real well for bad grammar and typos. A letter to a teacher should be perfect so she will be proud of you.
Now, emphasize the good stuff about your teacher in the first paragraph and the last paragraph otherwise you lose her. The middle can be about you and how you grew and how she helped. If this letter is about her helping you make sure you emphasize that. I did not feel it until the last paragraph where I should have got the point all the way throught the letter.
The best way is to use the first paragraph as a tool to get your point across and the last one to wrap it up and make some impact. The meat is in the middle. Make her feel special to you. The way you can do that is to tell exactly how she impacted your life. In other words, she listened to you, she gave you attention when you needed it, she was there for you, she made you work your hardest which benefited you and so forth. That will make a better letter. Although it is pretty good.
You are a grand student to acknowledge your teacher. Many work hard and long with no credit whatsoever. They dont always know they are making an impression on their students and helping them in other ways besides studies.
Good LuckCan someone read over this letter and tell me what to change?
I hope you realize how much you’ve done for me throughout the years. In fourth grade, I was afraid to come to “the other side,” because even though it’s hard to believe, I was afraid of you. I don’t know why I was afraid, but I was. It’s pretty funny now that I think of it, I mean, you’re not scary, you’re just Mrs. ******! When I came to St. Vincent, everyone in the class already had friends, memories, and many years together. I felt left out. The first class with you felt awkward but only because I had never had such a great teacher, it was so shocking, so hard to believe that I had gotten someone like you. I still felt left out throught out the year, becaused it seemed as though everyone in the class already knew you, and it wasn’t fair. I had bad grades in math, but you still loved me. I was such a shy person; maybe it was me that wasn’t confident enough to have good friends like the rest of the class already did.
In sixth grade, I was still a loner with only those “class friends.” I didn't have best friends so it kind of made it hard but I had you. My math grades improved, but I wasn’t on the honor role; and throughout all of this, you were still there. I don’t know how, but you impacted me and kept me going- you were confident that I could become more, so in return I did. You were my inspiration.
Seventh grade was the year that I actually made a best friend. Also, my best math grade was a B, compared to the C/D average in 5th and 6th grade. Seventh grade was the year I became more confident and secure, it was also the year you became my favorite teacher. Then another year ended, leaving one more year for me make a difference. I decided that I didn’t want to be “just another kid” that the teachers taught. I wanted to be me. I wanted to get to know people. To fit in. I realized how wonderful St. Vincent and its people were- and what I was missing out on. 8th grade finally came. It’s the best year of school I’ve ever had and probably the one I will remember the most. It’s the year I changed the most. I am now very confident, outgoing, and (most of the time) easy to get along with. Eighth grade has the most memories for me- and all this would not be the same without you. I don't think I would have written a biography of my St. Vincent life if it weren't for your believing in me. I don't think I wouldn't have been able to change so much in the past _ years if it weren't for you. You may be thinking that I’m crazy but you HAVE impacted me (once again). You actually helped me realize that life is fun to live even if you aren’t good at some school subjects. Now, don’t get me wrong, my life wasn’t THAT depressing- I just didn’t have an awesome teacher like you that actually TAUGHT me things, and wanted me to learn them. Most kids go to school and just learn a couple of things (or memorize them), take the tests, and forget all about it until they go to college or get a job. But, those are the kids who were never blessed with a teacher like you. Everything you’ve taught me, as a person, not a student, I will remember forever. The gifts that you’ve influenced (wonder, awe and courage) will be with me all of my life. People say you are a teacher, but I say you are a teaching friend. You are someone who helps in teaching life's lessons as well as class subjects. You care about your students and you will always follow God.
Change forth to fourth. She'll appreciate it.
Your teacher will like this, it is sincere, to the point (in most places), and hopefully an accurate portrayal of things.
Don't type words in all CAPS, I hate that.
I think that is an amazing letter, i wouldnt change anything, it sounds to me that you liked this teacher, and she liked you. Wonder full letter as long as you put your heart into it right?! very nicley worded. Wonderfull
Nice letter but I found some errors which are:
I actually helped me...
which should be
You acutally helped me...
taker the test...
which should be
take the test...
With I teacher
which should be
With a teacher
wonder and awe and courage...
which should be
wonder,awe and courage...
and
the last sentence should go a little different maybe you could ommit the ';People say you are a teacher,'; and just say you consider her a friend who follows God...
other mistakes like the spellings are already mentioned by other replies.
You don't need to change a thing., At the end the last sentence tell her thank you. Then sign your name.
wow that is beautiful!
I think she will love it a lot!
She will really know how much she helped you through the times!
GOD BLESS!!!
Near the top....F-O-U-R-T-H grade.... and honor R-O-L-L....
Near the bottom...T-A-K-E the test. Everything else looks good.
First, I am a teacher and would take a letter like this without a thought (okay, maybe a thought) of your typos, misspellings, and lack of paragraph format. However, since you asked, I would definately follow the advice of the previous answerer--Use paragraphs to make it easier to read and use concrete examples of what made her so special to you. For example, you say that the teacher influenced you with wonder, awe, and courage, but that is just telling, not showing us or her what you really mean. How did she specifically do things to affect you so deeply?
You are very kind and thoughtful to send this letter--they really do mean a lot to the teachers who receive them!
That was a great letter. Put it through spell check before
taking it to your teacher. The word forth is actually spelled::
fourth. I think there were a few other misspelled words. I do the same thing when i am typing along. You just get carried away is all. OH yeah the sentence toward the middle you said I, but you really wanted to put the word You in there I believe. Just proof read it again to make sure. I am sure this letter will make your teacher very proud and cry good tears
Good Luck in Ninth grade PS I read some of the other answers and I think them very rude and you should only listen to the ones giving you nice advice. Don't let the idiots in life hurt your feelings ever again. GOD BLESS YOU!!
CORRECTIONS: FOURTH, lowercase the word math, and i think that's it. very good letter and that was very sweet i think she seriously will cry! =] that's sweet of you to do that. i hope i corrected all that was needed. hehe
spelling-fourth
sound good, I'll think she'll cry happy tears.
every thing
its kindof drab ,maybe dont go for her crying but her going for she really made a difference to u .i hope it works out
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